Nature’s Destiny Snippet

As  the  month  of  December  encourages  the  festive  cheer  within  my  giving  soul,  I  find  the  muse  for  this  weeks  blog  post.  Perhaps  against  my  better  judgement,  I  cannot  help  but  feel  the  need  to  unveil  a  little  more  from  my  upcoming  novel  Nature’s  Destiny,  which  will  be  released  in  2014.

This  snippet  is  from  the  second  chapter,  and  as  usual  I  welcome  all  thoughts  and  comments.  I  hope  you  enjoy!

I  was  busy  clearing  up  my  table  when  the  door  opened.  The  air  crept  in  and  the  most  delightful  scent  cradled  my  senses  as  a  mixture  of  aftershave  and  the  woods  enveloped  me.  I  looked  up  to  see  who  it  was  and  froze. 
                It  was  him.
              My  breath  caught  in  my  lungs  as  I  realised  the  man  that  I’d  been  dreaming  about  stood  across  from  me.  He  turned  and  looked  directly  at  me,  and  the  same  emerald  eyes  that  I’d  memorised  shone  with   intensity.
                My  heart  raced  as  I  watched  him  walk  towards  the  bar.  His  body  moved  with  an  elegant  grace,  and  confidence  exuded  from  him.  He  was  tall,  really  tall,  and  the  navy  t-shirt  he  wore  clung  to  his  big  biceps. 
                I  didn’t  know  what  to  do.  Half  of  me   thought  about  turning  around  and  walking  away,  feigning  ignorance  of  his  presence,  but  the  other,  more  curious  half  wanted  to  know  more  about  him.  Against  my  better  judgment  I  went  to  the  bar  with  my  empty  drinks  tray,  where  he  stood  waiting  to  be served.
              My  skin  tingled   the  closer  I  got  to  him,  and  without  realising  it  I   quickened  my  pace  to  reach  him.  I  was  drawn  to  him  like  a  magnet,  like  some  unforeseeable  force  was  pulling  me  towards him.  I  opened  the  half-door  to  the  bar  and  stepped  in.  My  foot  caught  the  step  and  I  tripped  over  the  only  stair  there  was,  and  landed  ungracefully  on  my  face. 
                I  stood  up  as  quick  as  I  could,  dusted  off  my  apron  and  smoothed  out  my  hair,  and pretended  the  pulsating  throb  across  my  nose  wasn’t  there. It wasn’t  easy,  especially  when  tears  began  to  form.  I  gathered  the  nerve  to  look  at  him,  and   I  stood  with  my  mouth  open  appalled. 
                He  was  laughing  at  me!
          His  shoulders  bunched  up  and  down  as  he  continued  to  laugh,  and  my  skin  reddened  with  embarrassment.  I  knew  I  was  clumsy,  but  for   once  I  really wished  I  wasn’t.  I felt  like  a  fool.
                I   cleared  my  throat  and  attempted  to  act  cool.   “Can  I  get  you  something?”

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2 thoughts on “Nature’s Destiny Snippet

  1. “He was tall, really tall, and the navy t-shirt he wore clung to his big biceps.”

    Big biceps. Tasty.

    So they’re bonded in some way. Maybe he sired her, but I’m only guessing. Actually, I’m hoping lol. I can’t help enjoying the more romantic relationships that form between those who have that Maker/progeny bond between them.

    You do a good job of capturing the protagonist’s voice. I can sense her excitement, feel her embarrassment. Poor face! Can’t really gauge the guy too much, yet. That he laughed at her means he may be an asshole. Yet we all know how much we enjoy those types. 😉

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    • I know, I’m fascinated with describing the muscular stature of my protagonist’s desire. There is plenty more of that to come! I’d love to spill the beans and tell you if you’re right or wrong, but for now I will sit here, and smile wickedly because I know what happens 😉

      Oh I’m so glad you can, it’s something I’m always questioning when writing. I often wonder if my characters are complex and deep enough – though that may be over-analyzing as we said earlier! I adored writing that little scene, I had to have her falling because I could just imagine it happening especially the embarrassment that goes with it!

      I love that you think that, and it’s true, we do!

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